Istoryan Writers

[ronz_rodz]

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nice!!!

[ronz_rodz]

nice!!

[diem]

@galenostiel, All you need is to show an ID and to pay a small small entrance fee, I think.

[staticpulse]

the most encouraging piece of advice I've ever heard... prepares you for percevering even to a bitter end.

Here's something to that effect...
"You write your first draft with your heart
then you edit it with your brain" I couldn't remember where I read/heard this before

[diem]

[color=navy]@staticpulse, I think I know where you might have heard that before.

No thinking - that comes later. You must write your first draft with your heart. You rewrite with your head. The first key to writing is... to write, not to think!--Sean Connery as William Forrester in the film FINDING FORRESTER

And here's some more to inspire you all writers and poets out there!

We don't read and write poetry because it's cute. We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race.

And the human race is filled with passion. And medicine, law, business, engineering, these are noble pursuits and necessary to sustain life. But poetry, beauty, romance, love, these are what we stay alive for.

To quote from Whitman, "O me! O life!... of the questions of these recurring; of the endless trains of the faithless... of cities filled with the foolish; what good amid these, O me, O life?" Answer. That you are here - that life exists, and identity; that the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse.

What will your verse be?-- Robin Williams playing John Keating in the film DEAD POETS SOCIETY.


All great writers begin with a good leather binding and a respectable title.Johnny Depp as JM Barrie from the film FINDING NEVERLAND.

[Von!-x]

thanks for sharing the above quotes diem! Finding Forrester and DPS are two of my fave movies.

[crystselene]

hahahaha...medjo dugay pud ko nawala! daghan pa ko apason na basahonon...

[Von!-x]

The Unlikely Meeting

Steve just arrived at the Davao International Airport. He worked in an Electronics firm in Japan for four years. This is his first time to be back in his hometown.

He glanced around. “New Airport, sign of progress” he thought. There's not much excitement in his eyes, though. He knew full well that being the only child of a closely-knit filipino-chinese family, even his aunts, uncles and cousins will join his parents in greeting him at the airport. He brought what he had to bring: mostly electronic products as presents.

But there's one being that he wanted to see most: Analyn, the girl who broke up with him when he left. She said she got engaged with another man, but got broken hearted when the guy cancelled the engagement, left for Thailand, and had a *** change. Too bad for her!

She contacted Steve a year ago. He hesitantly opened the communication lines for her. Email, chat, and he even phoned her twice. She poured out her problems to him. He just listened and listened and thought he now knew everything about her. He felt a mixture of pity and hatred. But none of the love he used to feel for her.

Then she just stopped emailing him two month ago. He believed she’s still in Davao, but wondered why the communication stopped. He did not tell her of his coming. He did not inquire from any of his parents, either. They did not approve of her anyway. He reserved his questions for his upcoming visit.

He stepped out from the arrival area with heavy loads. His mother ran towards him teary-eyed. He hugged her but it was shallow. Her mom is used to the stiffness of his boy. But nevertheless she cried.

“Don’t cry ma.” He said.

“I’m just happy for you son”.

“Happy for what?” he thought, but could not let out the words.

He looked around his relatives. They were all smiles. He returned a blank stare but managed to say, “Thank you!” Then he pointed to a large cartoon saying, “There’s a gift for everyone in there”.

But a small boy carried by his dad caught his attention. At 60, his dad still looked strong. Steve never heard news about any of close relatives giving birth. He looked at him quickly but his mind returned to Analyn. The thought of her was just so irresistible.

His dad spoke up. “Let’s go straight to the restaurant and have our lunch”. Steve nodded and also gave his dad a hug. Except for the boy, his younger cousins also hugged him.

At the large dining table, there sat the boy on her mom’s right side.

“And who is this adorable young man?” Steve winked at the boy. But the boy had no reaction and looked away.

“Didn’t Analyn tell you?” his mom said.

This surprised Steve. “What?” His jaw dropped. He could not believe that his parents were in contact with Analyn. This time he looked at the boy intently. There is sadness in the boy’s eyes. He could be two or three years old, chubby, fair-skinned and also chinese-looking. He could see his own baby picture in the boy. But there is something that looked like Analyn too. It could be his brow, his nose, and the dimples on his cheeks.

“Steve” his dad grasped the words. “This is your child with Analyn. She died of brain tumor two months ago. She left us this kid. She requested us not to tell you anything until you arrive. We already had him DNA-tested. He’s your son. Steve Jr.”

[diem]

^^@von!-x, good effort in writing bro. I like the story; reads like another 'past love' story that you seem to be fond of writing It's a style!

Grammar needs some care though, some inconsistency in subject-verb, verb tenses (there are some sentences where the proper tense of 'is' would be 'was').

Example: He glanced around. “New Airport, sign of progress” he thought. There is not much excitement in his eyes, though.

I guess you have to review on that. There is a certain lack of detail that I feel is necessary. Like you didn't emphasize on what Steve or his family looked like. It's just that I feel as a reader I should have been given a clue to their appearance in order to make a connection when I reach this sentence:

This time he looked at the boy intently. There is sadness in the boy’s eyes. He could be two or three years old, chubby, fair-skinned and also chinese-looking.----> so..... Steve and his family are Chinese? Or Chinese looking?

I only made the connection in the following sentence: He could see his own baby picture in the boy---> Ahhhh....

For your kind consideration But a good effort~ please please keep it up! :mrgreen:

[Von!-x]

thanks diem! It's really hard to edit one's own work. pm'd you.